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A ride in the skies

13 May

This is in response to the photo prompt given in the following link:

http://bluebellbooks.blogspot.com/2011/05/short-story-slam.html

As thrilling as a ride
In a hot air balloon
The newness of our love.
Me, a young bride
In your arms would swoon
We nestled like turtle doves.

Far from the shackles
Of the ordinary world
In the lightness of love, we rose
A space for ourselves
We slowly unfurled
Our hearts in tipsy throes.

Communing with the clouds
Borne by the breeze
We were young and so full of hope
From the madding crowds
We had found release
So happy we were to elope.

The summits and the sea
The forests and the fields
Smaller and smaller grew.
Unbindingly free
Giddily we reeled
No fetters of fear, we knew.

But then came the storm
Wind and black thunder
We struggled to stay afloat.
Strange is Life’s norm
Ripping asunder
The sails of a wind-borne boat.

All tangled we lie
Here in the slush
The sky seems a distant illusion
The escaping sigh
From the dreams that we crush
Now mocks at our earthly delusions.

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22 Comments

Posted by on May 13, 2011 in Poetry

 

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22 responses to “A ride in the skies

  1. bluebell books

    May 26, 2011 at 8:26

    In general, we write a poem, find an image to illustrate or reflect our work, Now, let’s go reverse, we provide you an image,

    Invite you to contribute a poem or a short story based on the image you see,

    Be creative,
    Have fun!

    Hope to see you in…

    Bluebell Books!
    Xoxox

    Thanks for the support on week 1.
    you rock.

     
  2. mindlovemisery

    May 17, 2011 at 8:26

    “Strange is Life’s norm
    Ripping asunder
    The sails of a wind-borne boat.”

    Stunning lines, a powerful peace romantic and sorrowful

     
  3. shail

    May 16, 2011 at 8:26

    Nadira, loved it, especially the last lines.

     
  4. RoughWaterJohn

    May 15, 2011 at 8:26

    Beautifully done, what a pleasure to immerse myself in your words, thank you!

     
  5. Lyn

    May 14, 2011 at 8:26

    From joyful love to the loss of dreams..a beautiful description!

     
  6. thingy

    May 14, 2011 at 8:26

    This is so good. Excellent analogy about life.

     
  7. Alive aLwaYs

    May 14, 2011 at 8:26

    The only problem with balloons I feel is they cannot restrain the forces of wild winds. Of-course, you could have a rope tied to some pillar down on ground. Forgive me for being so literal.

     
    • dreamingthruthetwilight

      May 15, 2011 at 8:26

      Remaining tethered to the ground and not just living in the clouds is the best way to deal with life. That’s not just being literal. Huge wisdom there,:-)

       
  8. mish

    May 14, 2011 at 8:26

    This is an excellent analogy , using a hot air balloon to explain the ups-and-downs of new found love ! I really enjoyed it !

     
    • dreamingthruthetwilight

      May 15, 2011 at 8:26

      Well , I like responding to these prompts. At least the theme is decided for you. Easier than getting stuck with a jumble of thoughts , all seeming to go nowhere. Thanks.:-)

       
  9. lizbethsgarden

    May 13, 2011 at 8:26

    I like it. Thanks for visiting my blog.

     
  10. Gary

    May 13, 2011 at 8:26

    Greetings!
    Such nice verse!
    I enjoyed the way you have extracted such luscious passion from three hot air balloons!
    I have also submitted my own short & condensed version.

    Best Regards

     
    • dreamingthruthetwilight

      May 15, 2011 at 8:26

      Thanks Gary. Will come around and read more from you soon. Am taking a break to go trekking. Hope to catch up next week.

       
  11. Jingle

    May 13, 2011 at 8:26

    lovely…

    after storm, sun comes out…

    Thanks for the elegant entry.
    🙂

     
    • dreamingthruthetwilight

      May 15, 2011 at 8:26

      Thanks to you. I am really enjoying all these assignments. It’s like being back in school:-)

       
  12. BUTTERFLIES OF TIME

    May 13, 2011 at 8:26

    Great comparision with the course of love–the soaring start, a proud journey and the deflated dreams! A wonderful take on the prompt.

     
    • dreamingthruthetwilight

      May 15, 2011 at 8:26

      Am glad you liked it. Sometimes a prompt like this can make one all philosophical:-)

       
  13. P C JAIN

    May 13, 2011 at 8:26

    excellent as always.

     

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