Glimpses on the way

06 May

Earth, fresh furrows and the rain
Patches of ripe grain
Bending under the shower
A solitary eagle
Scaling the skies
In the distance

Dark dense clouds
Hanging over the river
A group of mules
Plodding up and down a pit
Cloth bags on their sides
Carrying shovelled mud

Eyes complacent
Soft and patient
They toil away
No questions asked
No demands
No attempt to break away

An old man, a woman with child
A young urchin in rags
Huddling beside a fire
Near an embankment
The mood- wistful longing?
Or just calm acceptance?

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Posted by on May 6, 2011 in Poetry


31 responses to “Glimpses on the way

  1. dunstancarter

    May 12, 2011 at 8:26

    Good stuff – thanks for the read. I love that opening line, “Earth, fresh furrows and the rain”.

  2. moonscribbles

    May 12, 2011 at 8:26

    i love the 3rd stanza the most……..this is a nice read, continue writing πŸ™‚

  3. Jingle

    May 12, 2011 at 8:26

    Appreciate your participation at poets rally,
    Please return favor to poets who are here yet you did not reach them initially,
    Bless your day.
    Have fun!


    • dreamingthruthetwilight

      May 13, 2011 at 8:26

      I have read and commented on more than 18. I did comment below that post. Not sure if it is showing up. Thank you once again JIngle. This is a lovely forum to read and and share.

  4. Judy

    May 10, 2011 at 8:26

    Your vivid images placed me in the midst of this scenery. Lovely poem.

  5. jennirey

    May 9, 2011 at 8:26

    Very nice imagery in this.. I wondered if you were working from a picture.. I like the one my mind made up…thank you for sharing

    Cheers~ Jen

    • dreamingthruthetwilight

      May 13, 2011 at 8:26

      Impressions recorded while travelling on a train, actually. I stay in Delhi for most part of the year and go back to the place I gre up in, which is in Kerala. It is a two day long journey if you take the train and the route takes me along the Western Ghats . In the rainy season, the scenery outside is really enchanting and I spend many hours just staring out of the window.:-)

  6. nithvarma

    May 8, 2011 at 8:26

    Liked your poem very much. Especially the last two lines. But some things which I found contradictory are the following.
    1. Eagles are usually not seen flying when the sky is covered with rain clouds.
    2. It is difficult to keep a fire lit when it is raining.

    All these could be noticed only because you drew the scene with your words too well!!! I hope you will take my comments in a positive sense. πŸ™‚ You can see my post at

    • dreamingthruthetwilight

      May 8, 2011 at 8:26

      Thank you for the detailed feedback. Actually , I had just jotted this down while looking out of the window in a moving train. Hence the apparent inconsistencies. But thank you for reading it so closely.:-)Am stepping over to your blog now:-)

  7. mindlovemisery

    May 8, 2011 at 8:26

    I can visualize every moment!

  8. The Reason You Come

    May 8, 2011 at 8:26

    I like how you painted the images of the surroundings and the people in the scene you witnessed. Through your words, I could almost see them.

  9. k2king

    May 7, 2011 at 8:26

    A beautiful description of a far off place, or is it? The dark clouds took me over the embankment, but it ended with a more positive question.

  10. Andy

    May 7, 2011 at 8:26

    Prose or poem, you did a nice job with this one.
    I especially like how you ended it.

    Thanks for sharing.

  11. Isabel

    May 7, 2011 at 8:26

    lovely. love the questions you asked and the imagery you described


    May 6, 2011 at 8:26

    Nature’s bounties and Man’s aspirations–both connected so well! I loved the peaceful and calm reasoning and the reassuring picture of the toils of a day! enjoyed the poem’s wistful beauty very much.

  13. Jingle

    May 6, 2011 at 8:26

    welcome to poets rally, smiles…

    well constructed work, thanks for sharing..

    Happy Mother’s Day to Moms around you. Blessings..

    • dreamingthruthetwilight

      May 6, 2011 at 8:26

      Your prompting made me take out those jottings and re-arrange it for the Rally. So thanks to you:-)

  14. K. McGee

    May 6, 2011 at 8:26

    Strong images. I appreciate how you left the question unanswered, leaving the reader to reach their own conclusion.

    • dreamingthruthetwilight

      May 6, 2011 at 8:26

      Thanks. Hadn’t really intended this to be a poem. It’s more of prose being broken up to resemble a poem:-) But am sure glad you folks like it.

  15. Sajeevs blog

    May 6, 2011 at 8:26

    A beautiful poem..very vivid description of nature and peaceful, contented people:)

  16. Peggy Nolan

    May 6, 2011 at 8:26

    I really like this poem but I don’t think you need the last two lines. Allow the reader to feel what they feel when they read your words. Good work!


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